Star Adder's Fangs (CBT fan fiction enkuksi)

[joppu]

It was cloudy day on Planet Sheridan as man walked towards barracks. He didn't care about weather becouse he had other things in his mind.

He was dressed to basic Star Adder uniform: black leather jacket black leather pants.Both were shiny black leather as symbolic for Star Adder's scales with red trimmed line to tell that he is mechwarrior. He also had black leather boots and too bars to mark his rank. Also his uniform included three insignias: clan's insignia (black star adder middle of star, galaxy insignia (ancient Terran tank) and cluster insignia (two ivory handelt revolvers)

His name was John Van Houten and he was Star Captain by his rank. He was proud as part of Alpha Galaxy and 87th Dragoon Cluster but he was ex.burrock. This was not his orginal clan. But he didn't think that, his thoughts were in diffirent place and time...

...His Timber Wolf Iron Adder jump its jump jets roaring behind woods as Blood Spirit mech, Nova Primary, tried to shoot him. Flash of ER Medium Lasers was blinding but it didn't have effect and he fired his massive LRM20 racks indirectly with help from one of own light mechs. Some missiles hit they target cousing some damage.

Jump jets roared again as he jumped from behind woods and fired his all six Heavy Lasers, small, medium and large, as alpha strike and destroying opposing Nova Primary. His heat indicator warned from high heat levels and he took his mech to cover.

From comm come message: "This is Star Commander Erin Keller from Clan Blood Spirit. I challange you coward member of Clan Star Adder to dual by rules of zellbringen. How do you answer surat, quiaff?" said woman's voice from comm.

"Aff, i accept your challange I Star Captain John Van Houten from Clan Star Adder accept your challange,.let no one interfier. By the way i'm ex-burrock so come and try your luck" Star Captain Van Houten answered and making his opponent angrier by letting her know that she was facing hated Burrock.

Her Blood Kite faced his Timber Wolf Iron Adder. Erin fired her LRM15s but John managed to avoid by jumping but her ER Large Lasers were ready and she fired them towards his mech. John cursed as his mech got hit to its left torso.

"You fight well for Blood Spirit surat" John commented from comm to Erin who was enraged about insult. "Your death Burrock will repay that insult" she said but she got answer "We will see that"

John fired his LRM20 racks towards Erin who was hit. Her mech lost its right arm and it got minor damage to its right torso as right arms explodet with LRM15 ammunition. "That was nothing but lucky shot" she said bitterly as she fired her ER large Lasers again. It was hit and John's Timber Wolf Iron Adder lost one of its Heavy Small Lasers from its left torso.

John used his mech's jump jets again as he jumped behind Erin's mech and fired all its remaing Heavy Lasers as alpha strike to back armour before she could react. With boom her mech's reactor explodet and turned Blood Kite as nothing but burning wreckage. "You was just too honorable Blood Spirit surat"

[Great-Devourer]

no 1juttu tämä on suomenkielinen sivu . joten kirjoita siis puhtaasti suomeksi

[joppu]

no 1juttu tämä on suomenkielinen sivu . joten kirjoita siis puhtaasti suomeksi

Kirjoitin tuon tarinan alunperin yhdelle enkunkieliselle foorumille joten sen takia se on enkuksi. Kyllä kai jengi täällä enkkua osaa kerta sääntökirjan ovat opetelleet?

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En nyt mene tarinaan sen syvemmin, mutta englanniksi kirjoittaminen ei ehkä ole kovin järkevää kun taso ei kuitenkaan ole mikään järkyttävän korkea. Artikkeleita puuttuu, vääriä prepositioita, sanoja väärin kirjoitettu jne.