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Heirs of Sodoma (Slaneesh-armeijani fluffia)

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Heirs of Sodoma (Slaneesh-armeijani fluffia)

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Teki mieli kirjoitella englanniksi jotain, ja kun ei tarinaa tuntunut syntyvän päätin kirjoittaa Slaneesh-armeijalleni koulussa keksimääni fluffia. Tämä on siis ensimmäinen englanniksi kirjoittamani vähän pidempi teksti, koittakaa kestää.


Heirs of Sodoma

In the distant past
before Mordheim, before Moussilon
there was a city called Sodoma
city so great, so huge
diamond of the north

But then they found Slaneesh

And glittering roofs of the beautiful Sodoma
turned black
and people became evil and crook
worshipping gods of chaos

Sigmar saw their hearts
Filled with anger and hate
And smote them with his hammer
Punished the beast
-Song of the Lost


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About Sodoma

Sodoma was great merchant-city, situated north of the Empire. It was practically under Empire's rule, but in theory, they were a city-state. Men of Sodoma were proud and brave, and were always fighting against ever-growing menace of chaos. In fact, their bitter hatred against evil gods (particulary Slaneesh) led them to several conflicts against barbarian tribes of the Chaos wastes.
But then it all changed.
It was midwinter, when small child was found in front of their great bronze gates. He was then adopted by Sigmar's Monastery.
The boy (who was named Soot, altough he never used it himself) was eager to learn, and rose quickly in ranks. In fact, when he was promoted to Great Patriarch of Sigmar (rank used only in Sodoma) he was only thirty years old.
And pale Soot started slowly to change religion of Sodoma. This period is often called the Age of New Faith. He bought great statue representing greater demon of Slaneesh to the cathedral, and recruited some young, fiery individuals to punish those who didn't obey him.
Then the Empire sent two ambassadors to Sodoma. It was beginning of the end.
Ambassadors were taken to Soot, who was sitting in the Temple of Slaneesh, formerly known as Cathedral of Sigmar, enjoying company of several young maidens. Two were horrified by what they saw, and nearly fled the terrible sight of statues of demons and naked bodies. Soot sensed their fear, and after short discussion, he flew into mad rage, and was "gifted by Slaneesh". In other words, he finally reached the ultimate challenge of daemonhood. Then he ripped the ambassadors to small pieces, and threw them to his hounds.
Terrible was anger of the emperor, and with haste he gathered huge army and started long march to the north.
But Sigmar was faster.
Twin-tailed Comet was seen above the Old world, which was bad omen, or so it was said. Then it hit Sodoma. When Emperors army reached the city, they found only piles of ash and few ruins.
And Sodoma was no more.

...Or so it was tought...

New Dawn

Franz Klainhof, spineless treasure hunter, found weird buildings, as he was wandering northern wastes, searching for legendary items left by Archaon's fleeing horde. He walked forward, until he noticed, that he was standing on ruins of an long ago razed cathedral. What took his attencion, was huge daemon-statue, which had smaller one in front of it. Franz stepped forward, and touched smooth surface of smaller, blackened statue.
Horrifying power grapped him, and with great scream Franz flew backwards and smashed to grey wall.
When he rose to his feet, he was Franz no more. Now he was to be known as Saltzhar, exalted of Slaneesh. Now he felt winds of magic running everywhere he looked.
And in front of him was standing Soot, Great Patriarch of Sigmar, or, as he called himself, and was called afterwards, Sothzloogh, favoured of Slaneesh.

Saltzhar and Sothsloogh gathered huge army, and started to terrorize the Empire's already war-torn northern areas.

About Heirs of Sodoma army organisation

Horde of Sothsloogh is mostly riding chariots. Speed is their strenght, and they never spend a night in same place. Sometimes they use small elite infantry units, but only in special circumstances. They don't often use daemons, as summoning rites are long and timetaking, and cannot do on move.

Characters


Sothsloogh, favoured of Slaneesh

Sothsloogh is huge winged daemon prince. He wields shining blade and commands winds of magic with ease. In close combat he is constant threat, and is feared by most of his enemies.

Saltzhar, exalted of Slaneesh

Saltzhar specialises in magic, and fears close combat. He leads often smaller attacks, as Sothsloogh is on command only in bigger battles.

Azhagallin

Azhagallin joined Heirs of Sodoma shortly after it's "foundation". He rides on a mighty beast of Slaneesh, and leads cataclysmic charges of chariot horde.

Guzlonbar and Tizlonnokh

Guzlonbar and Tizlonnokh left their Chaos Dwarf society, and joined Heirs to act as Saltzhar's attendants, lured by call of Slaneesh.

Damsel Adriana

Adriana fled from Bretonnia to Empire, and then she found Heirs of Sodoma. Since then she has been the most obscene and fanatical servant of Slaneesh in whole army. She uses winds of magic and stuns her enemies with her cold beatifulness, before stabbing a dagger to their lungs.

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Kommentoida saa. Erityisesti kieltä, englannin kielioppi tulee kumminkin sen verran perstuntumalta, kun koulussa on tullut nukuttua.
Ar-Senator
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Liittynyt: Ma 17.11.2003 16:00
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Kielioppi on muuten ihan siedettävää, mutta isoin virhe joka pisti silmään oli etuliitteiden (the, a, an) puute.
Me ei olla kotipoikia
Kysykää vaikka meidän äideiltä
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Thelacan
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Liittynyt: Ma 03.05.2004 17:59
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Kelpoa fluffia. Onko minkäänlaista listaa tehtynä, ihan vain nuiden charactereiden kannalta kiinnostaisi tietää.
- Kynä-ääliö
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Karu
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Viesti Kirjoittaja Karu »

Eipä mitään "virallista" listaa noille vielä ole. Tämä on enemmänkin tämmöinen isompi projekti. Jonkilainen turnauslista pitäisi varmaan tehdä, siinä olisi sitten nuo maagit ja perkeleesti chariotteja.
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Blackguard
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Liittynyt: La 28.02.2004 09:40
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Viesti Kirjoittaja Blackguard »

Viime päivien paras tissifluffi. Tohon kun saisi sen listan mukaan, niin avot.
"Jazz on imperialistien ideologinen ase vallankumouksellisten kansojen degeneroimiseksi." - Kim Il Sung
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Sodoma, heh heh... Joku on lukenut raamattunsa hyvin... ;)
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Loope
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Voisin sanoa että teksti on karua. Tarina on mielenkiintoista ja idea käy hyvin ilmi. Jos toteutat figuissa ideoita mitä pohdit kyna-aaliot kannulla on sinulla kasassa pervompi armeija kuin narkilla.
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Karu
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Viesti Kirjoittaja Karu »

Huh, en sentään. Kyllä mä ajattelin enemmänkin semmosta tyylikästä lookia armeijalleni, kaikenmaailman hävyttömät ja hävylliset jutut jääköön narkille.
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The Captain
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Karu kirjoitti:Huh, en sentään. Kyllä mä ajattelin enemmänkin semmosta tyylikästä lookia armeijalleni, kaikenmaailman hävyttömät ja hävylliset jutut jääköön narkille.
Parempi onkin, muuten käy samoin kuin 'narkille, joka on parhaillaan vieroitushoidossa Sotusta.
-Miksi Jeesuksen ja Marian päät loistavat valoa?
-Niillä on suvussa halogeenejä.
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